Board Thread:Specific Characters Qualification Exam/@comment-25983604-20150107003929/@comment-8914761-20150108121836

Personality: 10/20


 * You get half of the points, because you did a bit of contradictions. "Mia is very independent when it come to helping others." Either I'm reading that wrong, or I'm right. You also state what she is quite a few times, but we want to know how she acts out. Although you did well to explain that, you began to hop around on many different occasions. Also, numerous grammar errors, and misused words.

Appearance: 3/5


 * Being cute doesn't allow you to get past death. Well, not with the cold blooded killers I make. All the rest isn't bad other than yet again, misused words.

Background: 15/30


 * One, I'm trying to figure out how is she still alive if Kushina is her twin sister? The canon starts while Naruto is 11 or 12 I think. So that means, Kushina was maybe around mid 20s late Early 30s. Let's not forget the fact that they had a time skip where he was 16, and that Fanon Canon starts 30 years AFTER the fourth war. I'm not saying it's impossible, I'm just wondering, how? Also, all you talk about is the village, and her love. What about her! Like, Mia as a person. What about her trails, etc etc.

Abilities: 15/30


 * You're getting a low score on this because there isn't anything to go about. Nearly all sections, or in my opinion, are incomplete. You are going to have to expand more on her abilities.

Grammar: 4/10


 * Many many many misused words. Missing punctuation, etc. "She knows even knows the most complicated technique." <-- Yeah, no. There are many errors like that throughout the article.

Question 1: 50/50

Question 2: 25/50


 * All you told us was what she is trying to do. Not her role in the FC. Tell us her rank, her positioning with the others. Try some things like that.

Question 3: 25/50


 * You went in depth about ability growth, but what about character growth?

Total: 147 out of 210 = FAILURE