Thread:Kazeyo/@comment-8914761-20140428190406/@comment-1520269-20140430202343

In my opinion there were a handful of issues with this application, which I will list below as clearly as possible.


 * I'm not sure where you got the translation for your release, but you should use kanji rather than katakana. To this end it should probably be Sand Release (砂遁, Saton or Shaton). The pronunciation can be chosen based on your preference, but the kanji will remain the same.
 * Elemental composition is another issue that comes up. As we all know Earth + Water is a combination that creates life, namely in the form of Wood. Additionally, Yang is an element that breathes life into form. Thus to have to have this quite life centric composition forming something as inanimate as sand is awkward. Also, if simply manipulating sand without Shukaku's chakra is your goal, earthen methods such as this are available. Dirt, mud, and stone are already dictated solely by the earth release, thus I don't know why you'd want to complicate things with an advanced nature. If you really must have an advanced nature, then I would say that manipulating sand is far to simple for a KT. As such, if you still necessitate an advanced nature drop it down to KG.
 * To this end I would completely remove Yang from the Sand Release if you adhere to the advance nature route.

"With the help of the Yang-chakra, the user can make the dirt/sand take on any form with only their imagination, after transferring breath into it, as well as to his own fit, or wish."

Giving form to something with one's imagination is a property more befitting Yin, since it deals with imagination and form directly. Perhaps you simply mixed up the two.

Good luck on your revisions.