Talk:Ryōtō

Author Requested Review
When there is a technique with an imbalanced Yin and Yang, meaning that Yin and Yang aren't in equilibrium, the jutsu tends to consume the missing portion in order to reach the aforementioned equilibrium.


 * 1. That phrase is overexplaining and redundant. An imbalance already indicates that Yin and Yang are not in equilibrium.

They seem to be uncontrollable, despite the fact that they can be manipulated.


 * 1. This sentence conflicts itself. If they are uncontrollable, then they can't be manipulated.

This aura is able to consume the Yang of anything it touches.


 * 1. Again, this is redundant as it's already mentioned in the previous paragraph.

This aura can increase in size. ... This Yang goes into augmenting the blade's actual strength and durability, and some are transferred to the user to refresh their stamina.


 * 1. Those two sentences can be combined into one with either a comma or even a semicolon.

End of Grammar Review
I like the idea of this except for one thing: Yin and Yang, at least in this universe, deal in chakra. As such, claiming that it can piece "any substance" shouldn't not include non-chakra objects like the metal of weapons (kunai, swords, scythes, etc.), constructs that are not made of chakra, and the like. Remember that Yin is thought and feeling while Yang is stamina, cardio, and all that.