Board Thread:Naruto Fanon's Review Board!/@comment-25771248-20150530105147/@comment-26576038-20150530131709

Good work on personalizing the character, and linking him to a proper canon background. I love that you focus on background and appearances and the overall character moreso than the abilities. That's a rare trait. HOWEVER. I like to note something of important.

He's extremely powerful. Has all five natures A Rare Feat only achieved by the God of Shinobi (Hiruzen), and those with the RInnegan. A shit ton of jutsu and even a bunch of sage mode stuff. Yet, his descriptions are so small and vague. That's a huge nono. Your descriptions should always match the power. Because we need to know how he got it, what he does with it, and how he makes it his. That's the issue with a lot of power stacked characters. Because they just add stuff without description, they seem like "Oh you just added it." And that's not always true. there are characters who got a lot of shit and deserve it, they rightfully should have it. But a lack of description kills the vibe.

So my advice is to remove some of the stuff, or increase the description.

Overall, suburb job with the character bro. You came here and did your thing so awesome job.