Talk:Daihime Mizukou

Achrones Here
Of course, you may not know me. I'm just starting out in the unofficial review business of character articles. I will be honest, sometimes brutally honest in few cases. You may or may not care what I write on this talk page, but I just want to get the message to you, as well as other people who are looking at it.

First Thoughts: Let me say this up front: What the hell? Did you even stop to think of who the character actually is that the character's posting? That's Toph, from the Avatar series! People can take one look at and say, "OMG THAT IS A MOTHERF***ING RIP OFF!" Even as I look at the abilities and see that Earth Release is part of her arsenal, I can't help but shake off the fact that you purposefully ripped off Toph directly. It's an embarrassment to your character, and an outrage for Avatar fans.

Appearance: See above. Or, better yet, read here: the direct Toph pictures are too ridiculous. Word of advice: find different ones, or at least ones not that obvious.

Personality: The short paragraph that is her personality rather disappoints me when I compare it to canon personalities of the Wikia. It would be better if you went deeper into her thoughts, and answer questions such as; what's her view of the world? What's her fears? What does she believe her strengths are? The list goes on even more after that, but you see what I mean, don't you? This section needs more effort and description put into it. You can even look to other, professional articles for advice.

Abilities: I'm not even going to start about the Earth Release. Both it and the Water Release, as the way it's put, makes it seem like Water Bending in a sense. But, that's just my own personal opinion. The Doujutsu she possesses covers up the reason of her not needing hand seals to utilize jutsu, but it could help if you actually gave it a name, as well as its own background.

Overall, this needs a lot of improvement. Keep working at it, if you want to prevent other people as seeing it as a crap article that needs deletion.

--Achrones150 20:57, July 7, 2010 (UTC)