Talk:Shinsui

Ash's Feedback

 * This was requested by the user himself.

Well, firstly, I have a petty issue with the translation. With the kanji I gave you, it should be "Shinpisui" or "Shinpizui", not just "Shinsui". Nevertheless, let's move onto the actual content of the article.

The first thing I notice when reading the article is mention of ratios and a certain theory about them. While I personally understand where the ratio is coming from, you also have to understand that just applying "Yin and Yang ratios" together doesn't magically create elements. There's, very likely, other processes involved in order to create physical elements such as water, fire and so-forth. While I won't dwell on this for too long, introducing theories so blatantly might not be the best idea if you want clarity in your articles.


 * "This technique can be applied to many water techniques in order to get many results, The options with this technique is endless, it is simply unlimited as one jutsu of this technique can prove to be completely unrelated to another jutsu that's derived from this technique as well. As the Yin property gives the user many options in utilizing the technique."

That part of the second paragraph seems somewhat redundant to me, given that you've previously stated the information and you're simply repeating it in different words.

Its effects are quite understandable and are explained with clarity, so good job on that.

Overall, my verdict is that, while the technique itself is highly useful and so-forth, you might want to watch out repeating yourself multiple times, as well as directly introducing theories of ratios that people might not understand and/or disagree with. Another option would be to say that "nature transformations are forged from chakra, which evidently has a certain portion of Yin to Yang. Given that water already has a strong presence of Yin, this technique seeks to add a quantity of Yin-based chakra to pre-existing chakra-based water, therefore being similar to Amaterasu in this regard."

And that's all from me. Ashy (Welcome! ) 11:18, October 1, 2014 (UTC)