Thread:KiriSharingan/@comment-27762660-20160209225746/@comment-5281878-20160213032047

About your character: several times you wrote Hal instead of Hai. If I were you I think you should probably follow this steps, for example.

Hai Uchiha ("here you put the kanji and romaji") is a "rank level" from "his village". He is well know as the current Six-Tails jinchuuriki.

Then you write about his Background, Personality, Appearence, Abilities and then any other stories that you want (your fanfics or rolepays you have on the site).

And I know I'm not the best to tell you it (cuz english isn't my native language), but there are some mistakes, mainly punctuation. About your writing well that only practice can improve.