Talk:Rakuyou/@comment-18812574-20151208051338

Looks good so far Dragon. I think you meant "luxurious" mansion not "luscious" though, as the latter refers to food and hair commercials, usually.

Anyway the only problems I really picked out is that, well, the butler part is a bit unbelievable (Al... Alfred!?!?) and you didn't really mention what happened to his parents. I can see that you are trying to avoid a Sasuke story but I think the actual execution of his backstory could use some more work.

Also I'm not too sure about Samehada picking out a favorite wielder, and you don't really explain why that would happen at all.

Anyway nice work.