Board Thread:Naruto Fanon's Review Board!/@comment-24019243-20150529034643/@comment-26576038-20150529040300

Hmmm before I go to bed. I'll do this. It's going to be short, but tomorrow night i can do a little more. So Let me start off with what I like.

Pros: I love that you are dedicated to the character. That is haas your own personal touch to it. Shiguma is becoming a name synonymous with Kano. That's the most important thing here, to create characters which symbolize the author. Like the pure dedication you put into Shiguma is absolutely wonderful.

Cons: So.. I see what you're trying to accomplish. But I feel like you detract from the overall purpose by adding the Scorch AND Sharingan aspect. You're trying for the fire god. The pyrokinetic who can easily scorch the earth. Nothing wrong with that. I support the idea. However, I think if you focused on Amaterasu, the same effect can be achieved. Amaterasu is a flame whch burns at the heat of hell itself. If you wanted, you could use Amaterasu and Blaze Release to create Amaterasu orbs. As stated in chat, you misuse scorch release. Scorch release is not melting per se. It's an advance form of Dyhdration. Which is why it's a Sunagakure Kekkei Genkai (THe connection between a scorching desert and Scorch release). Notice, in the anime and manga, Scorch release never set anything on fire. And although it instant killed, their skins were just dried. Never truly gone. (Also I dont like how you have a sunagaure kg in a Konohagakure shinobi). Okay. So. What IM saying, cause i got to get to bed, is that get rid of Scorch Release. Take EVERYTHING you wrote for that, and put it in Amaterasu. Feel free to edit the color of Amaterasu. Just bacause it's known by itachi for using black flames doens't mean that's always the case. Like how Susanoo varies upon user, so can other techniques (We've never seen other MS techs besides Koto and Kamui be used by more than one person.) You can use spirituallity that for some reason his spiritual resonation causes his amaterasu to link with the actual sun goddess and make ghostly white flames, Or you can do what i do, and just ignore explanations.

Besides that, you have an excellent character. I think if you took my advice and removed scorch release, and focuseD PURELY ON amaterasu mastery, you would develop a unique character. Like my favorite uchiha on this site. He took Susanoo and made it his own thing to the point it's completely his. If you do that, but with Amaterasu, Shiguma can reach the level of Kekkei Genkai mastery.

Senjutsu, you should tone down a bit. It sounds too easy to enter sage mode..>Tho i can't really talk. Besides that, Shiguma is an excellent character. I just hope you do that, get rid of scorch release and focus on Amaterasu. Scorch release imo is holding SHiguma back not helping him. Having two kg is never a good idea. It's like. Mastering one is better than utilizing two. And Amaterasu has so little canon development, you could do everytihng your scorch release does with amaterasu.