Thread:Great Achlus/@comment-25152698-20160731224459/@comment-25152698-20160805021328

Can you look it over one more time? Not to redo it or anything, but just to specify where his hand went through her, and to correct any other minor spelling/grammatical errors.

Such as this sentence: His head ending up within her body

I can't tell if you meant to say his hand, and whether or not you already concluded the sentence.

But that aside, Long, trust me, if you can specify where his hand was, you will be rewarded. Let me say that again. I've got a pretty good idea as to what you'd like to get out of this RP; you will be rewarded in that regard, if you can just specify that teeny tiny bit for me.