Thread:Njalm2/@comment-5703581-20130712171602

I would like to create a clan called the Ochara Clan. The Ochara's history is that many years ago, a few members of the Uchiha clan realised that there was a way to use the Sharingan without the rage and without the revenge. When they had realised that, something happened to the Sharingan and it made it blue. They got kicked out of the Uchiha clan and decided to create their own clan outside of Konohagakure. The new clan set base at a secret place in the fire country and had its own school where the clan got taught how to use their abilities and for what purpose they should use it.

This new sharingan has about the same abilities as the red one except that it somehow allows the user to have a blue flame that he/she can shape however he/she wants and fully control. (instead of the black flames that burn anything you see) The sharingan is at it's strongest state when the user is calm or rather happy. The element that almost all members of the Ochara clan is born with isn't fire, it's water.

Since then they had lived in peace out in the Fire country, thinking they could always be there safely. Although only a few years ago the clan was attacked by an unknown threat and almost everyone got wiped out, the survivors ran to the only place they knew they might be safe, Konohagakure.(i know it's rather normal about the whole family dead story...so if it's not okay i might skip that)

The char i'd like to create is called Satoru Ochara. At the attack he had only been in school for a year and he had only learnt the basics but then suddenly most of his entire clan got wiped out, including his cute little sister which he loved very much. So he ran away and ever since then he has gotten more and more like the original Uchiha clan. He started school and he was always the one who was the best in the class even though he was always quiet and rather sad. but then one day he fell for a girl and she completely changed him. She made him happy again, they got into the same group in the Genin exam. (when you become a genin) He was so happy about this that he awakened his Blue sharingan. With the sharingan the group was the one everyone thought would win the Chuunin exam but in the it, the girl was terribly hurt and in rage he attacked the one who hurt her. But when he tried to use his sharingan something was wrong, he had awakened the Red sharingan. Noone in his clan had awakened it since the clan broke up but here he was with it. He murdered the guy to save her but since that moment she had never looked at him the same. He passed that stage of the exam and in the end he got to the final stage. He was up against the girl he loved, he couldn't do it. He failed the exam because he wouldn't fight her, no matter how much she begged him. He went to the hokage and decided to instead get an other team, the hokage allowed him. So now a few years later he had taken the exam again and succeded, right now they are discussing if he should become a Juunin and he has applied for the ANBU.

This is what i got so far and i'm sorry if it's too much like an other story but i'd like to hear what you have to say about it but i'd be glad if you simply told me what to change instead of telling me to forget the idea or something like that. I will come up with some other parts of the story if i have to but this is what i present to you. 