Thread:Kazeyo/@comment-6383890-20140320061422/@comment-1520269-20140320183701

I appreciate your civility and willingness to improve the content of your application. I'll list the particular issues I had with your content, and we can go from there.


 * The Japanese for your advanced nature should properly formatted. This is to say that kanji, not hiragana, should be used. Additionally, while this isn't involved in the apps denial, make sure you use macrons for the release's pronunciation upon approval.


 * The biggest issue about this proposed nature transformation is that it simply functions as a more powerful variant of a base element, namely lightning. Advanced natures possess active properties that set them apart from base elements other than a rudimentary increase in destructive potential.


 * Next, while the usage of ambient electromagnetic fields as a medium for the bolts of super-lightning is interesting, the absorption of oxygen and the previous mentioned fields to bolster the strength of the nature is odd.
 * While I believe the user of oxygen as fuel was an attempt to tie in the fire release component to the element, the fact that the element behaves solely electrically would mean that oxygen would probably weaken the nature transformation. Furthermore, if the absorption of ambient oxygen is any more controlled than that of a natural flame, it would constitute a property that's more suited to the Wind Release.
 * As for the absorption of electromagnetic waves from the surroundings, the scale and power of absorption you've defined is too much. Most notably, your character would be absorbing all light and bioelectromagnetism from the surrounding 500m. If being blinded was not enough, this would likely just kill everything in the surroundings. Even if your technique didn't effect your own bioelectromagnetism, which would normally kill you, you'd be able to erase light and instantly kill everything a 500m radius...which I would consider overpowered.

Overall, this needs a big rewrite in my opinion. So, get back to me when you get a chance and we can see if we can figure something out.