Talk:Shin Hyō

Confusing
There are many run-on sentences in your abilities section, and many abilities that aren't the purview of Taijutsu are finding their way into your Taijutsu section. Try not to make your character a jack-of-all-trades. I can already see you've tried to write him up as being faster than Shin, stronger than Shin, better senses than Shin... just stop that. Your character has one, one specialization that allows him to have superiority in that one category. Everything else about him, from his other skills to his attributes, should be roughly equal to the other Genin, if not worse.

Genin are not Jonin-level shinobi. They do not have godly speed or power, they are not masters of everything. They are little more than academy graduates with some training and experience and a specialization. This tournament is not about who is strongest- it's a collaboration between many users on the site to make an enjoyable roleplaying event for everyone. If you are trying to "win" by being the "best", you have lost sight of the real reasons for this event. Please change your approach to this character. The deadline is the 14th, please have your character in line with the abilities of a Genin by then. Chrono Nexus (talk) 19:40, May 3, 2013 (UTC)