Board Thread:Specific Characters Qualification Exam/@comment-8914761-20150104170803/@comment-6003865-20150107012419

Appearance: 3.5/5

While you do a good job of explaining the clothing and things like that, there is little to no description of Sigma's physical appearance beyond his hair. This focus on clothing is a pretty common problem. Just add it and you should be able to get pretty much full points.

Personality: 15/20

The sections are all good, but how they come together to say how he is, really isn't there. It basically says he has these traits, but doesn't define them into one overall personality. Think about who he is, not just how he acts.

History: 24/30

Chunin exam section was half done, so I knocked off some points there. That and there were some inconsistencies with various events, like a mother not being worried if her kid disappeared for multiple months. I know you said stuff about it, it's just that it's something i have to note.

Abilities: 25/35

Several sections of the Rinnegan are still missing. That and the shear number of abilities is fairly daunting. Not all of these make complete since, like him recreating Raikiri all of a sudden. The Ninshu stuff is also incomplete.

Grammar: 7/10

There are a number of grammar errors throughout the abilities section in particular. Specifically the Chakra section of it in the beginning of abilities. While not breaking, they do indeed interfere with the sense of flow within the section.

Q1: 50/50

Basically 50 free points.

Q2: 45/50

His role makes a fair amount of sense, though how feasible it is is questionable. How you do this though is up to you. You may want to consider cases where people don't want his help, and how he will react to issues that pop up with no clear moral standing.

Q3: 45/50

You explained how his abilities were going to grow, but you really didn't explain how the character as a whole might grow. Would anything challenge his beliefs, would he face hardships that might challenge his view of the world. Things to think about.

Overall, 214.5/250

You have passed my section of this exam. A third op still needs to chime in.