Talk:Eye of The Demon (Prologue)

Cyberweasel89's Thoughts
Wow, that was actually pretty good. I'm surprised by how good that was. You obviously have some previous experience with writing. I'm especially intrigued by the love interest. (sappy romantic)

I noticed a few oddly worded sentences, though. And I must say that Echo-kun's mother was a bit... strange. She talked too... overly dramatic... yeah... -_-U

It was also kinda odd that you referred to "witchcraft". Witchcraft doesn't really exist in Naruto. I mean, you could've called it a "Jutsu ceremony", or something. ^^U

I noticed only a few spelling and grammar errors, so good job! ^_^

Anyway, I look forward to seeing more of this story. Maybe you can bring Echo-kun to the roleplay of The Watchers. Which... no one is showing... any... interest in.... -_-

Well, you might need to tone him down a little. He can get stronger as the RP progresses, but he can't be super powerful right off the bat.

................. (cough cough)

Anyway, that was really good. You do narrative really well. It's a nice break from the usual stuff around here, where there's either only dialogue or no narrative whatsoever, or it's all bad narrative and no dialogue whatsoever, or yadda yadda yadda... Goddess, I hope no one else reads what I'm saying here. O_O

Anyway, I hope to see more of it. ^O^

--Cyberweasel89 05:44, 16 November 2008 (UTC)