Talk:Kami Fuyutama

Hmm...
The idea of the character itself is a good one, but he's slightly rough around the edges.

The concept of an amnesiatic past has been used many times before, but if you could put a certain spin on it that would help it become more of its own idea, that would certainly help the character.

The appearance is a bit cliched, as most people would prefer their character to be muscular(who wouldn't?), but couldn't that be written out differently?

And my last problem is that stories need to be written out on a different article than the character's own page, unless it is an excerpt being used for informational purposes.

Other than that, I have no problems.

--Cold hard steel will eat your soul... 15:15, 22 August 2009 (UTC)