Board Thread:Specific Characters Qualification Exam/@comment-25152698-20141211020520/@comment-4869113-20141213015530

It is theorized that upon her return to the ranks of the ANBU, a debate had circulated to prohibit Sayuri from donning their mask, as it would get in the way of her beauty, and could be used instead, to their advantage, had the enemy taken a quick liking to her as most often did. -1 Over the course of her lifetime, Sayuri has been seen sporting several different outfits on various occasions. As a loyal shinobi of Konohagakure, her outfit consisted of a pair of tight, jet-black leggings, topped with a plain, jet-black shirt with long sleeves, the collar of which is worn quite low, revealing the sizable cleavage of her extravagantly large, melon sized breasts. A protective Flak jacket was worn atop her revealing black shirt, though the zipper was only zipped half way, to ensure maximum exposure. Sayuri's Forehead Protector was at times, worn around her waist as an additional belt, complementing her light-brown colored tool belt, which holds together her various ninja tools, such as Shuriken, Kunai, and Senbon, with her two blades tucked safely at her sides. Finally, Sayuri's choice of footwear lied in agile, but comfortable, shinobi sandals, navy blue in color. -1 Appearance Section= 3 However, this being said, to her, her method of achieving peace seems to be absolute, at least in her eyes, though she will not strike down those with conflicting ideas, dependent on just how contrast they may be. -1 •	This just doesn’t make sense. She cut all ties with the world of the living, and her method is absolute. This makes these people threats to her “perfect world”, and in the previous statement you argued that she would trap threats in the other dimension. That being said, she is also quite merciful, and remarkably forgiving, hoping to unite the world rather then force unnecessary wars. She sees all people as one of her siblings, who can easily be forgiven, and corrected down the line, whilst also secretly filling the void of growing up alone. -1 •	Again, she’s merciful but she tied all things with the world of the living. It seems you are trying to make her bad, but not that bad. Don’t justify badness, just let it happen to be bad. This allows her to keep her chakra signature virtually untraceable in even highly populated areas, while being able to conduct her own espionage, using seductive measures to obtain valuable information from her victims. -1 •	I don’t get how this makes her chakra signature untraceable. Some sexy gal isn’t going to stop a sensor from sensing her massive chakra reserves. Here, she would kill off her emotions entirely, allowing her to excel during missions and whilst on the battlefield.-1 •	But then she’s merciful? Yeah, come on Daz. Personality= 16 Under the tutelage of her father, Sayuri was exposed to fighting on a daily basis. She traveled everywhere with her father, no matter how dangerous the mission, or how inappropriate the situation. -1 •	Unfortunately, she’s my character’s daughter so I know him more than anything. Of course she probably travelled with him on missions, but exposed to fighting on a daily basis? Her father is a pacifist, always has been. If anything, fighting is one of the things she wouldn’t have been exposed to. Calling it out here. Upon her promotion to a genin, she was placed on Team Konohamaru at the request of her grandmother, from whom she would learn to utilize the Rasengan.[9]-2 •	She became a genin at the ages of 5 and Konohamaru was 8-9 during that time. Yeah, he didn’t have a squad then nor did he even know the rasengan. While in the land of iron, Sayuri began to hone her swordsmen skills under Mifune, the general of the samurai. However, over the course of five years, Tsunade's body slowly began to give way. As a result of techniques that specialized in splitting cells, Tsunade had been shortening her life span, whether she had intended to or not. -1 •	Why would Tsunade go to the land of Iron? That just doesn’t make sense honestly. Eventually, Tsunade grew worse, unable to leave the bed. She passed away shortly after, with Sayuri at her bedside. Sayuri labeled her grandmother's medical ninjutsu as kinjutsu, and swore to never use them anytime in he life. Whether she possesses the ability to use them is unknown, though it is certain that she does indeed have knowledge of them. Sayuri departed from the Land of Iron days after her grandmother's passing, lugging her bagged corpse over her shoulders. This event would prove sufficient in allowing Sayuri to awaken the Mangekyō Sharingan, becoming the only living Uchiha member to acquire such an eye power. -4 •	Sayuri was a trained shinobi who was raised to be a weapon basically. She killed people without mercy everyday. She grew up knowing what “fighting on a daily basis”. Notice that every other uchiha in canon awakens their mangekyo through some major “shock”. While the closest person dies to them, that happens to just be the “shock” everytime. Itachi Uchiha, the closest person to Sasuke, died and he didn’t awaken the mangekyo until he learned the SHOCKING truth about him. Izuna Uchiha was the closest person to Madara and he had the Mangekyo after his brother died. You see what’s going on? Since she knew about death and she understood that Tsunade was going to die eventually, I doubt the awakening of the Mangekyo. Offering an explanation, the toads instead took the girl to see Gamamaru (ガマ丸), more commonly known as the Great Toad Sage (大ガマ仙人, Ōgama Sennin), who then foretold yet another prophecy, declaring Sayuri as the Child of the Prophecy (予言の子, Yogen no Ko) due to her profound ambition, believing her to someday bring upon a change to the world, wether it would be for the betterment of mankind was unknown. -2 •	First, every shinobi in the leaf had the Will of Fire, but that doesn’t mean that they were called the Child of the Prophecy. How she was declared the child of prophecy is “iffy”. Secondly, the child of prophecy had existed for thousands of years. Gamamaru knew about the prophecy and told the Sage about the one person that would reunite the beast. The previous ones were Naruto and Sasuke. I doubt a new one just comes randomly in the next generation. So, that’s another reason I took off another point. Sayuri was forced back into reality upon becoming pregnant, a result of continuous abuse and rape. Months of sleeping around had finally taken it's toll on the woman, leaving her in an unconditioned state. During her pregnancy, she realized she would no longer be able to hide from her issues, dealing with them seemed to be the only logical choice which lead to any kind of progress. -1 •	She doesn’t run from her problems or hide from them, but then she doesn’t give birth to the baby. It seems that she would change because of the baby’s birth becoming inevitable. It sort of eliminates the purpose of the child affecting her if she didn’t have it. You know? History= 19 Hailing from not one, not two, not three, but three prestigious clans, (No points removed, but fix that little error ;) which allows her to store massive amounts of chakra on a point on her forehead and then release it; a feat that only her predecessors, Tsunade, Sakura and herself have ever accomplished (No points, but fix that error too. Thanks) Sayuri is also knowledgeable of the eight inner gates, having trained partially under Might Guy during her childhood. She is able to open the first gate, though does not make use of the technique very frequently, due to the tremendous stress it places on it's users. Because she received training from Might Guy, Sayuri also has knowledge of his signature Strong Fist fighting style, which she has since incorporated into her own movements. – 1 •	Wait, wait wait. She’s a medical ninja but trained by might guy? She was trained by Tsunade almost everyday until she was beaten into a bloody pulp until Tsunade died. By time Tsunade died, might guy was a cripple. No way she could learn anything from him. Nice try. Sometime in her lifetime, Sayuri has also copied the blueprints of the lariat using her sharingan. This allowed her to mimic the exact fighting style of Killer B and the former fourth raikage, A, who specialize in a wrestling based Nintaijutsu. Sayuri's variation technique, like many of her unique usages, comes in the form of her metal. By first coating her body in multiple layers of iron, Sayuri can then lunge forth at her opponent to launch a vicious attack of ariel supremacies. This attack is almost a certain kill when combined and further amplified in power with the usage of her refined Chakra Enhanced Strength. -2 •	Sayuri copied blueprints of the Lariat? Who just has blueprints of a technique used between the raikage and his partner? You sort of are just taught that really, and only the partners use it. It’s a team technique mostly. And not only that, but it’s in Kumo. These “blueprints” would have been heavily guarded. So, I’m taking off points for a lack of explaining how the blue prints were acquired and why they even exist.

By simply concentrating her chakra through her blade, Sayuri can almost mimic the functions of Hiramekarei (ヒラメカレイ). Sayuri's version of the sabre technique is deployed through a chinese chakra dragon, which is emitted through the tip of her blade, which is controlled by Sayuri's own chakra. -2 •	This just doesn’t make sense. Hiramekarei changes the shape of the entire blade. For the blade to change, it’d have to be made out of something malleable. Chakra alone is unable to do that.

Her particular interest in medical ninjutsu led her to utilize it in conjunction with her metal release. Throughout Sayuri's bloodstream reside additional blood cells, both red and white, produced through the Yin-Yang Release and enhanced through the Metroid Release. What began as artificial blood cells have since trans-mutated into the legitimate argument. The presence of the additional red blood cells allows Sayuri more oxygen than any other human. -1 •	So now she has creation of all things? I doubt it, but you don’t explain how she does it here. I have no choice but to deduct points. The white blood cells arguably play a much greater role than the red blood cells, defending Sayuri's body against both infectious disease and foreign invaders. Akin to her supreme chakra prowess, the metal in these white blood cells aid in the battle against bacteria and other viruses that attempt to consume Sayuri. -1 •	White blood cells don’t use metals for defense at all. There exists an additional organ in Sayuri's stomach, just below the pancreas entitled the Chakra Filter (濾過器チャクラ, Rokaki chakura). Similarly to all of Sayuri's inventions and gadgets, this object was also created through extensive usage of the Metroid Release. The primary function of the filter, as it's name suggests, is to filter the chakra that enters Sayuri's body. All chakra Sayuri absorbs is immediately transferred towards the location of the filter in the hopes of being cleansed immediately. The invading chakra is met by several hundreds of metallic ions which help to purify the chakra along the way. After the chakra has been properly prepared, Sayuri can then utilize it in a manner of her own. -1 •	Again, how does it do this? How does the filter purify the chakra. Metal ions just travel into the chakra and then they eat it up? How do metal ions do this. In fact, the speed of Kamui is said to be more than twice the speed of the Fourth's signature technique.-1 •	Nope, just wrong. While others have attempted to utilize other forms of space-time ninjutsu in order to counter being imprisoned, they found that the entire dimension is coated in a thick and durable space-time repellent barrier, prohibiting entrance and exit by the likes of outsiders. -1 •	Just a cheap trick overall to prevent people who may be superior in terms of space-time ninjutsu from escaping or even fuinjutsu. You basically tried to erase the weaknesses of Kamui from existence by saying “it’s a thick durable space-time repellent barrier” but you don’t explain how the barrier prohibits space-time techniques from happing. This allows Sayuri to utilize the tailed beasts stored within her dimension in a unique matter, most notably Kurama, whose hands, feet and tails she uses to deliver a quick, devastating strike to her opponent. Creating portals is somewhat stressful for Sayuri, though this is dependent on how far away the dimension she is transporting from is. •	I assume this is from the Kurama thing, so I’ll just say remove it. No points taken off. As the head of the Uchiha Clan, Sayuri holds a natural affinity towards the fire nature and is well versed in all of her clan's techniques. Raised, at one time, as the last remaining member of the Uchiha clan, Sayuri visited the Naka Shrine on a daily basis to configure and interpret her clan's historical techniques through the use of the information left behind, such as textbooks, diaries, and scrolls..-1 •	This doesn’t make sense because the Naka shrine didn’t have any of these things in it. It even gives a list of the contents of the clan; the Uchiha Clan didn’t need to leave behind scrolls and such because they were always together. They didn’t anticipate their own demise. The Naka shrine has information of important things like the MAngekyo Sharingan, not stuff on fire release techniques that the kid’s parents could have just taught them. Plus, any of that ish would have been destroyed during pain’s invasion. Sayuri is a true master of Metroid Release, a Kekkei Tōta formed through simultaneous use of Magnet Release, Yin Release, and Earth Release chakras respectively. By converting her chakra into the source of life, Sayuri is able to create iron and steel structures out of the metallic particles found all around the environment. -2 •	Alright, if I wanted to read Hashirama’s stuff, I would. Anyway, I’m taking off points for that and because you didn’t really explain how those three elements work in conjunction to create the “Metroid” structures. Similarly to the First Hokage, Hashirama's Wood Release, all of Sayuri's creations have the ability to detonate, producing a large explosion, greatly surpassing that of an explosive tag. -1 •	How does she do it? Midway report = 21 points Sayuri's metal is exceptionally durable, and has never been melted. In fact, the metal on multiple occasions has survived lethal attacks composed of black flames, which are said to be as hot as the sun itself. -1 •	Just gonna call Bullshit on this and keep on moving. Furthermore, by relying on the chakra of the environment in contrast to that of her own, she can entirely negate the effect of utilizing her own reserves, in a sense giving her an infinite supply of chakra.-1 •	Natural Energy and Natural chakra are not the same thing; she can’t access “natural chakra”. That’s not what Senjutsu is. Because she possesses the exceedingly rare Straight Tomoe, Sayuri's vision is further refined, to the point where she can differentiate even a shadow clone from the original, and see through the mist created by several Kirigakure shinobi, a feat only believed to have been accomplished by the likes of Itachi Uchiha. -1 •	Hiding in the mist counters the sharingan because the mist is made out of chakra. The sharingan would just see tons of chakra rather than anything, thus hiding the user from their dojutsu. synchronize her Kamui with the space-time technique of her opponent, allowing her to access places ordinary shinobi could only dream of going, such as the Pure Land, by synching Kamui with a deceased individual's soul being transferred to the other world, and Mount Myoboku,-1 •	Can’t go the pure land unless your dead. An ancient combination thought to have been lost and forgotten prior to the Fourth Shinobi World War, Sayuri has renewed the legacy of her ancestors by gaining control over the Nine-Tailed (九尾, Kyūbi) phenom, Kurama (九喇嘛, Kurama). With her mastery over shape transformation and chakra control, Sayuri possesses the ceremonial power of encasing the entirety of the nine tailed fox within her Susanoo. This greatly improves the power of not only Kurama, but Sayuri's Susanoo as well. By manipulating Kurama into her avatar, Sayuri relies on the beast's chakra instead of her own. Furthermore, with the power of such a foul creature at her fingertips, Sayuri virtually has an infinite source of chakra in a sense, so long as Kurama abides to her ever command. Such a tremendous output of charka allows Sayuri to utilize large scale techniques like never before, so much so that she can encase Kurama, along with her susanoo, in a durable sheet of metal for further protection. According to herself, this makes Sayuri's defenses virtually impenetrable. While under her control, Sayuri manipulates Kurama similar to a puppet. Due to this reason, Kurama can be seen utilizing the weapons of Sayuri's susanoo, as well as creating tailed beast balls upon her request. •	No points off, just remove it. Total = 17

Grammar = 7

Question 1: 45 Question 2: 50 Question 3: 50
 * You didn’t say a thing about Hashirama’s cell in sayuri’s article.

Total points = 207

You have failed the exam.