Thread:EmperorWest/@comment-25152698-20150120233850/@comment-7040990-20150121005306

I'm not asking for you to make it "acceptable" for me, Dojutsu. Just giving advise that it could be interesting to expand on the content of the article. Describe better how this has been acquired and achieved. How your character got knowledge of these things, and so on. But that's all up to you, honestly.