Thread:Dragon Lord Erin/@comment-26956327-20170808172131/@comment-26261281-20170808182719

Right so I'm going to address my biggest problem first, Soushiki. He's an Otsutsuki with a ton of powers, something that's pretty common. Not to mention he's also a sage of six paths. Nothing about him really pops to me. I'd also like to mention that Rinnegan and Tenseigan on the same person is extremely odd and in my opinion should not be possible. All in all he seems like something I've seen a ton before and never really though to be very unique or interesting.

I'll tackle Ace next. I'm going to say this to start, he doesn't have rinnegan or Ems. He also doesn't have a thousand natures. These are both things that are on most of the Uchiha so I give you props for leaving them off of yours. However leaving that alone he seems to be pretty standard Uchiha. He seems to have many of Sasuke's abilities including Hawk summoning. To sum it up I'd say that you have a character that could do more if you made him more unique. Again though, congrats on not being an Uchiha with a thousand things on them.

Sawaii Hitomi is done quite well in my opinion. Nothing to overpowered about her. However her story seems very stuck in the Naruto canon, which isn't a problem. However it limits your ability to make it unique as you're stuck making her a witness to most of the events of the story. If you gave this character her own story without tying it so deeply to the main plot I think there could be a lot more for her.

That's my two cents on the matter. I think you should definitely get the other admins opinions on these characters though. As a final note I think you should focus more on Ace or Sawaii than Soushiki.