Board Thread:Fanon Canon 2/@comment-25152698-20140926235216/@comment-7040990-20140930222010

First of all. I am kindly going to ask you to avoid references to DBZ and other series. This is Naruto, not DBZ for the next time you apply for something. In my eyes, that made me take your application less serious and weaks your potentially strong points with a lot. Thirdly, I’m going to ignore the entire discussion that happened and give you my sincere opinion for the reason why I’ll deny this application.


 * 1) Apparently, correct me if I am wrong, you’ve said that Kaiki has been raised more by Sayuri than his father. In this application, however, you state that his father raised him. This makes your application for the Mangekyou Sharingan a lot weaker.
 * 2) While I’ve said that I’ll ignore the discussion, comparing your own application with another is wrong. You do your work, it’s your creation, do not pull in another’s work.
 * 3) I want you to detail the ‘uncontrollable’ CoH for Kaiki. Why is it uncontrollable? What has it made it that way? For what specific reason? Or can you elaborate it differently? And why is it making him blood thirsty? He hasn’t ever shed much blood now, did he?
 * 4) What specifically made his father the reason of his awakening? Of course, father-son can have a close relationship, but what made theirs so special? What triggered that emotion to get the Mangekyou?
 * 5) As for abilities. Why would he awaken Amaterasu/Blaze? How does the ability connect to him, his personality and what he has been gone through? And as for Susanoo, what trait does it represent your Uchiha? (I will let you figure out what I mean with that, because I’ve my own theory about it)

I hope this will help you on your way… despite that some may have been answered in your comment above this one.