Thread:Davidchola2/@comment-1875854-20120924170355/@comment-4097945-20120926203542

the fact is, just information is not enough. first, you need to correct any existing grammar mistakes, then format the text. everything is the same, BLAND (im not yelling). there are no bold characters (only to japanese terms that are translated) and it shouldn't be a -, it should be a :

compare your page with the ones i led you to. compare how uninviting yours is. it needs to be well presented, with some images. the information is too far apart. everyone knows the ninja ranks, you dont need those. go to konohagakure's page and see what are the topics that should be written about. also, you need to be more informed. there are NO daimyos for a village. theres a daimyo for a land, and only one. also, use bulleted lists instead of just paragraphs. i cant tell you everything, or else you wont get the hold of it. also, you need a better translation and kanji in the page. tsumujikaze is too big and clearly a google translation. those are bad. inform yourself or ask other users for better translators. i suggest nihongodict, but you need to know a bit of japanese or at least have common sense to use it properly.